Neo was running down a street in New York on a very cold night. He was chasing a shadowy figure. The figure wasnt the only thing he was chasing. Neo was looking for someone. Someone very important, but didn't know who yet. The shadowy figure was the key to finding this person. Neo continued running down the street as fast as he could. The shadowy figure took a sharp turn into an alley. Neo followed closely with all his might. The figure had stopped, as Neo slowed to a walk. "Mr. Anderson, why must you follow me?". The voice sounded frightingly familiar, as Neo answered, "Smith?", with a question like tone in his voice. The shadowy figure turned around. "Ahh, Mr. Anderson," Smith said as he looked very pleased with himself, "So good to see you alive and well." Neo was shocked to see that the shadowy figure that had told him that their was a very important person, back at the far end of the street before the chase had gave way, was indeed the very Agent Smith, well Neo thought to himslef 'Many Agent Smiths', that he had fought after he had talked with the Oracle. Smith looked at Neo and said, "Treachery is the key to the end of your species Mr. Anderson., and to the end of my existence, which will be bliss." Neo looked back at Smith and said, "Since their are so many of you running around these days, how am I sure that your the real Smith and not just one of his clones?" Smith only smirked as he lunged toward Neo, who quickly stepped aside. Neo back handed Smith across the face, knocking him down. Neo looked down at Smith and said, "Ok, since you guys obviously travel alone, where are your buddies?"Smith, who was feverously embaressed, looked back toward Neo and said, "They're right behind you." Neo turned around to see six other Agent Smith's behind him. Neo grabbed Smith that was on the ground and threw him at the others, knocking three of the would be attackers down. The other three jumped over the downed ones, in time to see Neo power up and do the superman thing. All the Smith's got up, looked at each other and slowly started turning to walk down the alley. The Smith that had been chased by Neo stopped, turned, looked up to where Neo was in the sky and said to himslef, "You will not be able to find the person you search for Mr. Anderson, for we will find that person first".
Neo was flying, thinking about what had just happened. The Matrix itself had many programs onto many other programs. This in turn created a functional world. Smith had only taken over about 30 people in the Matrix, but he would continue on until he had taken over the entire Matrix. The Matrix architecht had said, "You are a species enveloped by destruction, and hate, you dont deserve to exist, but without you, we would not exist." He was right about that, but humans can live without the machines. Smith will eventually take over the entire Matrix, but somehow not be able to get to the architecht and take him over. Then again, one never knows what will happen. This was very disturbing to Neo. Neo had very little time to find this person, who was very important. Neo continued flying on, thinking about what he was going to do, since he was the One. He then thought, 'Even the One, needs a little help sometimes. Neo landed at the safehouse. He went inside to be greeted by only Morpheus. "What happened?", asked Morpheus. "It was a trick by Smith to lure me into a false sense of security." Morpheus looked at him puzzled. Neo looked back at him explainingly, "Smith was the shadowy figure you told me to meet. I did that, and after the figure told me that there was a very important person in the Matrix, I then asked who it was, but the figure just took off running down the road. I gave chase, and eventually found out that Smith was the figure, and that know I know that, the person is in extreme danger." Morpeus looked at the ground and said, "It is in this truth that I ask you Neo", Morpheus looks back up, "Do you believe that this person is real and if so, is that person ready to be free?" Neo takes off his sunglasses then looks at Morpheus and says, "I believe that this person is real, I can feel it, "Morpheus looked into Neo's eyes that showed the Matrix code as Neo continued, " I'm not sure if that person is ready to be free, but It is too late to wonder, we must free this person, regardless of what happens." Morpheus nodded his head in agreement as Neo put his sunglasses back on. The phone rang, and Morpheus picked it up. It's for you. Neo said, "You first, I can defend myself if something happens, so go". Morpheus agreed, "Very well," as he dissapeared. Neo hung up the phone. Neo thought again on what to do. The phone rang again. Neo picked it up, and as he was about to be brought back to the real world, he knew what he had to do, find, protect, and eventually free that person.

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Erm...ok. I spotted this only after your question that it was left out...I dunno what to say except: paragraphing!
I'm sorry Haxxor-this story's exciting, and is one of the very few who do involve actual matrix characters, but it's very hard reading the development. Also the plot's a little hazy, but a few more chapters will definitely clear the haze. You don't have to wait for replies to add more to your story, just do, and hte quality will show...keep going Haxxor, you'll do fine.

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Agreed...good start, but paragraph separations would make it easier to read. It seems like you're excited to get it all out, like someone who wants to tell you what happened to them today because it's so exciting, but they don't take a breath...I like it, though...just stop for a breath once in a while! Keep it up, excellent start!

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I thought it was a good start- you obviously know where you're going with this, and so far it seems interesting. The only advice I could give it just to slow it down a little perhaps....otherwise your story will be done in about 4 posts! But well done...I'm excited to see how this develops

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Yeah, sorry about not paragraphing. I typed my story in wordpad, then transferred it here. Im going to have the first chapter up in about two to three days, hope you guys don't get impatient. With all my school time (Being a senior rocks), and time after school is almost taken up, the only times I trully have to write, are on the weekends, and sometimes after school.

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Yeah that story rules, you should check out chapt 1 of uknown Anomaly

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