Something's not quite right.

Valasher

She wasn't feeling right. Maybe it was the flu, maybe not. She had asked the women at work if they were sick... yes, were they throwing up... no. "Maybe you're pregnant", said Barb.

"Pregnant? God no, I can't be pregnant. I'm just sick. Well... bye," she smiled warmly and walked back to her cubicle. She sat down and decided to get a pregnancy test kit at lunch. Yes, that is what she would do, indeed.


Sitting on the toilet in her modest one bedroom apartment, she set the used test on the counter. She had taken pregnancy tests before and waited exactly like this. It was always such a long five minutes. But this time something was different, both the blue lines appeared almost instantly. Thought rushing through her head, "Is something wrong with the test? Why is it doing that? Will it still look like that in five minutes?" She was fighting to keep her mind focused elsewhere.. where else is there? I'm pregnant. She began to cry. This was the moment her life had been moving toward, always wanting children to teach and to finally have a purpose in life that is inescapable. The weight of it literally crushing her. The tears came forth and she was powerless to stop them. She rocked and cried on that toilet seat for a few minutes, and then she was off. Back to work.


"Oh my god, it hurts so bad! Do they expect me to go to work like this? Why won't they put me on bedrest? The doctor said it was sciatica. I'm so heavy that a nerve in my back is literally being pinched, and I can't believe that it would hurt this bad and they won't do anything about it," She said to her husband.

"Well, what do you want me to do about it?" he replied.

"Nothing, I just needed to say it."


She climbed into bed just as before. She missed being able to breath deep breaths, and to bend over, and to lay normally in bed. 60 more pounds was really taking it's toll on her physically. She sat up to try and get comfortable when it happened.

"Uh oh, I think my water is breaking!"

"No it's not, go back to bed."

"YES it is. We have to go to the hospital."

"NO we don't, just go to bed."

"Well I at least have to call the hospital..."

"No, because they will just make you come down there, and we don't have time for that."

"Honey, I know you are tired and so am I, but this baby is really coming. Once the water breaks, it will be out within 24 hours, or I will be in serious trouble."


Silence loomed in the hospital room. She was having a boy, so why would they put her in one of the "pink" rooms? But that was soon not a concern. The pain was deepening. Coming in waves, each more violent than the last. It was overwhelming and not tolerable.

"Please go get the nurse."

"The nurse is busy, stop bothering her."

"It's her damn job! She said she would check me in fifteen minutes and it's been twenty. Tell her to check me so she can give me the drugs."

The silence was too much for her. Every once in a while a moan would find it's way out of her mouth, but the air was mainly dead. It was getting to the point that she started to contemplate suicide. If I could just find something to knock myself in the head with, I'll be home free... the thought lingered in her mind. With every spasm of pain, with every plunge of the knife in her back. And then the man with the epidural arrived and put the needle into her back. It was painless compared to the misery she was facing. And suddenly, nothing. Sleep came...

She woke up for the pushing, and that was the best part. It felt so good to let this creature out of her cave. And he came out, crying in the most beautiful ringing cascade of sound she had ever heard. But what would she do with a baby?


Visitors came and went from her home, but more in the first week, than the second. And slowly all visitors stopped coming. She was alone, and time was on her side. She could finally bond with the new baby she had brought home. These are the best moments of life, there will never be another time like this, she thought. And so her new life began where the old one ceased to exist.


She needed a shower. She put her son in his basinet and left the bathroom door open. Stepping into the warm water felt like a peice of heaven. She could take a shower all day if it was feasable. But she heard a noise outside of the shower. She knew her son was awake again, and so she quickly finished and opened the drape. As she opened it, she saw the cat dart out of the bathroom, or at least, she thought it was the cat. But our cat isn't orange, it's grey and white. Oh well, sometimes we see the wrong colors out of the corner of our eyes...


I have to take the bottles out of the dishwasher now. She looked over at the baby to make sure everything was well, and noticed some movement. She went over to him and saw that his mobile was spinning, why was his mobile spinning? Two week old babies can't reach that far. She reached out and touched one of the padded bunnies on the mobile and it stopped instantly. How strange...


"Oh ****!" Her one month old son was sitting up. She specifically remembered reading that babies do not sit up until four months at the least. His sitting up in the basinet had scared her. Is his neck caught on something?! She ran to him, but could find nothing wrong...


She locked herself in the bathroom. Nothing makes sense, nothing... she kept telling herself. She was in the deepest form of denial. A denial that was overwhelming her mothering instincts to protect her child. She was in desperate need to protect herself from her child. She heard a bang and the door flew open, it was her son. This is so wrong, oh my god...


If you like it, I will go on with the story.
ThereIsNoMatrix

As McDonald's would put it, "I'm lovin' it"!

I love how you never define who "she" is referring to throughout the story, adding a sense of mystery. Please, continue!
Neo's_Son

Awesome Story, I wonder who it is! The Mother at least. As Stank Said BRAVO, yes please write more! :D
Valasher

And so I will go on with the story.

She locked herself in the bathroom. Nothing makes sense, nothing... she kept telling herself. She was in the deepest form of denial. A denial that was overwhelming her mothering instincts to protect her child. She was in desperate need to protect herself from her child. She heard a bang and the door flew open, it was her son. This is so wrong, oh my god... She could not contain her fears. She was frozen in an adrenaline rush, and it was too much for her, she passed out.

She awoke to find that it was a dream. The most horrible kind of dream. Ahhh, but I am awake now, and it was only a dream, so I'm okay, I just need a couple of seconds to get it together... But... This... This is not my bed. I'm on the bathroom floor! Oh my god. Could it be real? I'm alone. She jumped up and ran into the other room. She crept up to the basinet and peered over the edge from a safe distance. He was not there. She turned around and horror flooded her veins. She jumped back and realized that she was face to face with him. And he was being carried by an old woman, no less. A grandmotherly type. Now the motherly instinct kicked in and she was ready to lunge for the child.

"There isn't time to tell you why I'm here. I'm not going to hurt your child. I know that you just found out one of the things he can do, and I know you don't want to believe it. But for your safety, I think you'd better come along with me."

No response. She couldn't process the information.

"I am the Oracle. But we must leave now, or we will be in very real danger. Come on now honey..." and she extended a hand with a warm smile on her face.

There is a strange woman in my house, but she knows! She knows what I saw him do. I guess I have to trust her.

And so the two women set out in the sedan.

I will continue this when I figure out where to go with this story. :)
PP

Very nice... I'm loving it, and can't wait to see where it goes from here :)
Valasher

Okay, just in case I don't make it here tomorrow, I guess I'll try to progress the story tonight, er... this morning.

And so the two women set out in the sedan.

"Turn here," the Oracle said, and so she did.

"What about my husband? When can I contact him?"

"You can't reach him, he's on their side now."

The twinges of denial setting in again. She couldn't believe it, she wouldn't believe it. What is she talking about?

"Yes, I'm sorry, I know that's not the answer you want to hear, but it's true all the same," said the Oracle, "He is bent on obeying the rules of this world, and so we cannot help him now. But for you, there is hope. Haven't you seen it? In your dreams? You are in greater control than you might think."

I can control my dreams now, I couldn't do that before I had my son. But how could she know that? No, that's not what she's talking about...

"It's a little bit of him rubbing off on you," the Oracle nodded to the baby. "I'm sorry that you are not ready to understand now, it's a shame, it really is, but time is not on our side, I'm afraid..."

This is my stopping point for the moment... where the heck is this going? I'll figure it out sooner or later.
Hitman

This is really really interesting...a mother learning her son is more than he seems, and in turn she learns her own abilities....I love it! Yes, please continue with this...you're off to a great start!
Agent_Drake

Wow, not bad. Continue I say! :)
Valasher

Wow, not bad?! Of course it's not bad, it's amazing... lol.

"It's a little bit of him rubbing off on you," the Oracle nodded to the baby. "I'm sorry that you are not ready to understand now, it's a shame, it really is, but time is not on our side, I'm afraid..."

Just then things started to progress in slow motion. Bits and peices of glass shattering in an eternity of spinning. Glass spraying against her skin, and she could do nothing but hold on. When the car finally came to a stop, it was not on the ground, it was hanging off of a three foot wall leading into a leveled parking lot. She couldn't move, couldn't breath as the wind was knocked out of her. In a state of disbelief she climbed out of the car, caring not if the car were to fall on her, and began to pace. If I can move, then I'm not hurt she told herself. When her breath came back, she climbed the wall and looked into the car. The Oracle and her son were gone.

I'm dizzy, I've been drinking, I need a few moments
PP

Way cool story; I'm looking forward to the rest :D
You've definately got talent
Omega Ascendant

nice
Neo Xavier McLeod

wow nice story want more soon as you can
erm it's like a suspence thriller i like it
no i love it
HomoUniversalis

Just woke up from reality, or should I say school. I have been pretty damn busy with my exams.

I love your story, but most of all I like the mother/son-perspective, like hitman said. I hope to see from you soon: It has potential!
Valasher

Let's see if I can keep this story from going downhill...

The Oracle and her son were gone. She looked around and didn't see them. Then she did see the Oracle across the street, but obscured by a tinted window. She dodged traffic to get across the street. She entered the building that she had seen the old woman in and noticed that it was a hotel.

She started to systematically check each adjoining room for the old lady, but couldn't find her. So she went to the desk. She wanted to scream at the young man behind the desk, she wanted to scream so that the whole place would know that she had a problem, but before she could, the young man said, "Mrs. Washington, it's a pleasure to see you back again. Your room is ready..." and with that he held a key out to her. She took it and looked at the room number, 342. She was suprised, but tried to conceal her facial movements, which was difficult.

"Thanks," she said.


She put the key into the door marked 342 and opened it, but something horribly odd happened. The inside of the room was not a room, but another hallway. A hallway that didn't match the hallway she was standing in. The hallway she was standing in was mauve baseboard and red rugs with toupe walls, not luxury, but quite nice. And the hallway that this door lead to looked a bit more dismal, with yellowed walls and some writing on one of the walls. This doesn't make sense. But she stepped through the door and walked down the new hallway, she was approaching a T. Left or right, which way to go?

"All right, you made it, now come on," it was the old lady. She looked to her left and there in the middle of the hallway was the Oracle standing in a doorway. She followed the command and entered the apartment.

"Tell me what's going on, damnit," she said to the old woman once inside.

The old woman just gave her a knowing look. "You're son is more important than you could imagine," and with that she noticed that her son was in the next room hanging in midair. She jumped up to grab him from whatever he was hanging from and found that he was just hanging there. "He's the one, and now, I'm afraid that you are no longer necessary..." and with that, a man in a white suit stepped out and pulled out a gun and shot her in the head. Her life over, she was gone, dead. But she couldn't understand how this was possible. She wasn't ready to die, but unfortunately, she didn't have a choice.

"It begins"...

This was a sad excuse for storytelling, I'm sorry to have wasted your time. It started off good, but I can't end it, I'm sorry. If I had years to work on it, maybe, but it was just for fun. So thanks for reading.
Agent_Drake

Wow, that's pretty awesome! One thing I think, is it's too real life. It's a lot of her being pregnant and stuff like problems like that. I think you should add a little more matrix into it. But other than that, I love it! :D Good work :)
Thanks
Valasher

Like I said, it's a sad excuse for story telling. I started fine, I liked what I said, and then I had to write about something I don't know about, to tie it to the Matrix. It just didn't work. Sorry about that.
Agent_Drake

Originally posted by Valasher
Like I said, it's a sad excuse for story telling. I started fine, I liked what I said, and then I had to write about something I don't know about, to tie it to the Matrix. It just didn't work. Sorry about that. .

It's alright :D Good story though... Damn it! You're ahead of me in posts again! :D
ThereIsNoMatrix

Lol don't take it so hard on yourself, that was pretty damn good! I liked it a lot, good job!
PP

How can you apologize for that?! I love it, especially the abrupt ending! You have real talent; I can't wait to read more from you in the future (assuming you'll write more for us, even if it IS a different story). Thanks for the fun read :)
Valasher

You guys are very nice. I would like to mention that the part up until the baby was born is just me recounting everything that happened to me when I was pregnant. Even the stuff my husband said to me. Of course, it was just from my perspective. I've always wanted to make a horror movie about a woman who has a baby and then out of nowhere, strange things happen, like the baby can fly and is plotting to kill the mom while she's in the shower. It would be better than Rosemary's baby IMHO.
HomoUniversalis

Damn it! You're ahead of me in posts again! :D she passed me too.. Maybe I should visit the board more often...

Oh well.

I liked the story pretty much, but the guy in the white suit was a bit abrupt.. I would like to see more stories from you.. Perhaps next time without trepanning a mother ;)
Valasher

Originally posted by HomoUniversalis
she passed me too.. Maybe I should visit the board more often... I don't spam, I just type what is necessary to get my point across. Perhaps next time without trepanning a mother ;) LOL.
MacLeod

Hey-the best stories are how it's tied to real life! I agree though that its a little scary, especially for the guys (us wimps! lol!) so please don't pull off that Rosemary's thing lmao. I like the way you did it though-don't pull yourself down. Remember: the best way to write about a situation you're not familiar with is putting familiar situations and emotions in it...trust me! ;)
Truth

Don't they always say write about what you know? I like this a lot Valasher, I really hope you continue with it. And I enjoyed the pregancy bit too, it put in a lot of reality, it really did feel as if you were there. Don't feel as if you need to make it more matrixy, write it how you want and how you feel happy with. I'm sure it'll be great.

And damn! I just read the whole thing through and the whole time I was thinking 'just like Rosemary's baby'. I thought I was going to sound really good comparing it to that, and then a couple of previous posts mention it! Grrr..... Just for the record, it really is like Rosemary's baby....and I loved that...........
Valasher

I had been compared to Mia Farrow (the actress in Rosemary's Baby) a lot, especially when I had very short hair. Everyone said, "You look just like Mia Farrow", so I had to watch that movie. Little did I know that I would love all Roman Polanski's films. My recent favorite is The Tenant. Very good, that one.
HomoUniversalis

Originally posted by Valasher
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Originally posted by HomoUniversalis
she passed me too.. Maybe I should visit the board more often... I don't spam, I just type what is necessary to get my point across. Perhaps next time without trepanning a mother LOL.
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I never said you spammed, dear, just that your post count is higher. One of these days, though, I will catch up on you. Perhaps you should consider writing another story.. More Matrix-related with a less "sudded death" ending.

I liked reading it again,

HU
neo7272003

This is a great story Valasher, you seem like you put a large deal of thought in to it.

here's to hoping you write more.

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