The Red Pill

Part 1:

It was a normal evening for Gary Cole. Haxxor, was his hacker name. Just sitting at the computer, searching randomly for answers. He didn't realize his importance.
'How come when I close my eyes... It seems more real?' He typed into the computer. He wasn't expecting an answer. He never was expecting an answer. But expectations, can be deceiving. A message from some guy named Hitman appeared on the screen.
'Go to the bridge on Elder Avenue.'
Haxxor was surprised. But before he could reply, his computer shut off. Now, as you can imagine, he was nervous. I mean, how could he trust a guy named Hitman? It didn't seem right. But he had no choice. He knew that. His life was a mess. He would rather take the chance and die, then live a life of suffering...

When he got there, no one was around. He waited. He waited for 30 minutes... And a car came by. It looked like a mob car... That really made him uncomfortable. A door opened, and a man in sun glasses and all black clothes opened the door. It was night and it was raining out... And he was wearing sunglasses.
"Get it." Said the man.
Haxxor hesitated... Then entered the car...

Nice start, nice start, like it

agreed:) and now I want to read MORE of it:D

Yes! Thanks a lot guys! I've always dreamed of having people admire my work ;)

Part will be up real soon. :D

Part 2:

"As you've no doubt have guessed... I'm Hitman."
"Hitman... What kind of name is that?"
"Explanations are on the way... The one driving is MacLeod"
"Hey" Said MacLeod
"Hi...."Replied Haxxor
They pulled up to a hotel. Once inside they entered a small little room.
"Do you know why you're here?" Asked Hitman.
Haxxor paused... Then answered "No."
"You are here because you feel something. Something you can't explain what you feel, you just know it's there. Do you know what that thing is?"
Haxxor thought... "The Matrix?"
"Do you know what it is?"Asked Hitman
"No... What?"
"The Matrix is all around you. You can... Feel it when your hurt. You can... Taste it when you're eating dinner or lunch. It is our senses, our hates, our loves and our lies. It is all."
Haxxor thought. "So you're saying if I punch you in the face, that's The Matrix?"
Hitman laughed. "I thought you would be smarter than this."
Hitman took out two pills from a container he had been holding.
"You take the red pill, I show you why your life is a mess, and why you're here... You take the blue pill... You wake up in your bed, and none of this ever happened."
Haxxor thought. 'Why is this happening to me?' he thought, 'why me what did I do...'
"Take your time" Said Hitman
Slowly but carefully Haxxor took the blue pill. Inspected it... And put it down. He took the red pill and swallowed it with some water...

Originally posted by Agent_Drake
Part 2:

"As you've no doubt have guessed... I'm Hitman."
"Hitman... What kind of name is that?"
"Explanations are on the way... The one driving is MacLeod"
"Hey" Said MacLeod
"Hi...."Replied Haxxor
They pulled up to a hotel. Once inside they entered a small little room.
"Do you know why you're here?" Asked Hitman.
Haxxor paused... Then answered "No."
"You are here because you feel something. Something you can't explain what you feel, you just know it's there. Do you know what that thing is?"
Haxxor thought... "The Matrix?"
"Do you know what it is?"Asked Hitman
"No... What?"
"The Matrix is all around you. You can... Feel it when your hurt. You can... Taste it when you're eating dinner or lunch. It is our senses, our hates, our loves and our lies. It is all."
Haxxor thought. "So you're saying if I punch you in the face, that's The Matrix?"
Hitman laughed. "I thought you would be smarter than this."
Hitman took out two pills from a container he had been holding.
"You take the red pill, I show you why your life is a mess, and why you're here... You take the blue pill... You wake up in your bed, and none of this ever happened."
Haxxor thought. 'Why is this happening to me?' he thought, 'why me what did I do...'
"Take your time" Said Hitman
Slowly but carefully Haxxor took the blue pill. Inspected it... And put it down. He took the red pill and swallowed it with some water...

yeah, good one. And when you come to the Smith scenes - you have to mention me, okay????:D

Originally posted by smith_fan
yeah, good one. And when you come to the Smith scenes - you have to mention me, okay????:D

Lol, but you gotta give me some kind of other name, becasue Smith Fan would kinda ruin it :p No effence.
But wait! If you give me your name, I can make you Agent_[name here] :) Agent Drake, Agent Kender, and Agent You :) Interested?

Originally posted by Agent_Drake
Lol, but you gotta give me some kind of other name, becasue Smith Fan would kinda ruin it :p No effence.
But wait! If you give me your name, I can make you Agent_[name here] :) Agent Drake, Agent Kender, and Agent You :) Interested?

hmmm...what about Agent Selissa (that`s my real name)

Part 3:

"Follow me" Hitman ordered.
They walked into another section of the room.
"Have a seat"
Inside were Hitman, MacLeod and two other people he didn't know. He didn't feel like asking their names at the moment. In front of him was a cracked mirror... It slowly startd to re-form into a un-broken mirror like jelly. He stared at it. It was moving with the wind.
"Get a signal, Xavier" Said Hitman.
"Yes sir."
The computers starting making noises.
"I got it!" Said Xavier.
"Haxxor, jump through that mirror... Now!"
"What do you mean, jump through it!? That's impossible! What if I..."
"Now, we don't have time! GO!"
Haxxor got up, paused and took a step back... He felt stupid, made face, but he ran for it anyway. He jumped. His right foot hit the mirror, and it chilled him to the bone, but before he could get a reaction, he saw Xavier hit a button and he was inside... A red pool...

Part 4:

Haxxor struggled for air. He reach the top and there was some kind of bubble. He pushed it open, pulled out a plug from his mouth and gasped. He was bald, naked and there were plugs all over his body, and his eyes felt like no pain he'd ever experienced before. Just then a machine-like flying creature came down from the dark destroyed sky... It grabbed him by the neck. He sturggled to get free but couldn't. He panicked, but the machine eventually let go. 'WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON!!' he thought. Just then the pool he was in opened up at the bottom, and he slid down. He slid for 20 seconds then landed in a giant dirty water pool. The roof opened up to reveal and giant machine arm that fished him out, and brought him safely up.
"Welcome to the real world" Said Hitman... Or so he looked like Hitman...

It begins...



Nice work. Im enjoying this by the minute

Originally posted by TheOneIsGone
It begins...



Nice work. Im enjoying this by the minute

Hey thanks a lot man. :) Part 5 will be up soon.
P.S. I make this story up as I go, and I'm on all day, and I love to write, so there will never be a huge gap in timelines between my Story. :) Oh and part 5 is where a lot of characters get introduced :)

Quote:

- Haxxor thought. "So you're saying if I punch you in the face, that's The Matrix?"


That's one of the funniest things i've read here lol!

I wanna be in it! Shorten the name to eon.

good

You are doing well

Originally posted by Eon dreamhacker
Quote:

- Haxxor thought. "So you're saying if I punch you in the face, that's The Matrix?"


That's one of the funniest things i've read here lol!

I wanna be in it! Shorten the name to eon.

Lol thanks, and you're name is perfect to be in it :) So sure. But I don't know about part 5, maybe...

Yeah that's okay. I'll look forward to it! Nice job so far.

Part 5:

"Good morning!" said Hitman
Haxxor had fallen unconcious after that arm grabbed him. The shock and pain was too much for him.
"...Why do I look so different? What's happening?"
"Come... And see for yourself."
Hitman walked Haxxor through a mechanical maze.
"This is my ship... The Lurker. It's a hovercraft. This is the core. This is where we send out our signals and hack into the Matrix"
Haxxor was confused.
"You already know MacLeod-
"Hey" Said Macleod
"-and Xavier"
"Cheers" Said Xavier
"The ones you don't know are Oracle2.0, we call her O2, and EonDreamhacker, we call him Eon"
"Hi" Said both Eon and O2.
"Come have a seat"
Hitman directed Haxxor to a chair.
"This will feel... A little odd..."
Hitman plugged a plug into a hole in the back of Haxxors head. It felt like being stabbed with a giant icicle, yet feeling no pain. He opened his mouth, but couldn't scream...

Originally posted by Eon dreamhacker
Yeah that's okay. I'll look forward to it! Nice job so far.

Good news, you're in it :)

Good job! Let's hear some more!

Originally posted by ThereIsNoMatrix
Good job! Let's hear some more!
Hold on I gtg for supper, then I need to think it up and type in.... It should be up in 45 minutes give or take

Part 6:

Haxxor was in a white room. It seemed to stretch beyond and farther... He turned around.
"This is the construct" Said Hitman, "We can load anything we need here. Guns, clothes, simulations anythind we need... Do you want to know the truth?"
"Yes..."
"Be warned the truth is shocking... I think you can handle it"
"Shocking? How?"
" The Matrix is a system. It is a dream world, so to speak. This is the real world.
A chair and two seats appeared. Haxxor and Hitman sat down and Hitman turned on a TV which was convieniently placed there. It showed Buildings and various structures.
"The year was 2009, and we gave birth to Artifficial Intelligence... But we had no idea it would come to this..."
"To what?"
"Take a look for yourself..."
Haxxor was so focused on the TV he didn't even realize they were in a dark patch of land, a cave-like place.
"This is the world we live in today."
Haxxor looked around, observingly. He was amazed and nervous and confused. 'What's going on?' he thought.
"The machines got so powerful, they took over... Everything. At the time they were considered to be solar powered, so we scorched the sky to blocked out the sun... It was our only option.
Unforetunatly, they found a new way to survive... Combined with a form of fusion, the machines found all the energy they'd ever need..."
The TV showed a pod similar to the one he was in. A Human was getting liquified and then the machines sucked out their energy. It was horrible. Haxxor felt sick and disturbed.
"So what is the matrix Haxxor? I'll tell you. The Matrix is a system to keep us under control in order to change a human being... Into this." Hitman held out a batery.
"...No... This can't be... It's impossible! You're lying! What the hell is wrong with you!?"
"Calm down Haxxor."
"No!!" Haxxor charged at Hitman, but Hitman got out of the way.
"Get ahold of yourself Haxxor! Think! This is the truth! Aren't you happy to know it?"
Haxxor gave him an evil look... Then his face turned sad... He almost cried.
"It's alright Haxxor. You're free now..."
"...Thank you" Said Haxxor after a lot of thought. He didn't care about his old life. He had nothing to let go of.
Hitman's phone started to ring. He answered it.
"We got trouble!"

Great stuff. :)

Whoa...where did THIS come from??
Who cares!
I love it!

Agent_Drake...Welcome to the Fan Fics! Keep writing, man...you're off to a stellar start!

Sweet start Agent Drake, keep up the good work

I didnt catch this one until.....just now.
"So you're saying if I punch you in the face, that's The Matrix?"
That is probably a question I would ask.
I am honored to be in your fan fic Agent_Drake.
I want more of the story, please.

hang on. good writing n all, but wheres my part :-(

Keep up the good work man!

Originally posted by Haxxor
I didnt catch this one until.....just now.
"So you're saying if I punch you in the face, that's The Matrix?"
That is probably a question I would ask.
I am honored to be in your fan fic Agent_Drake.
I want more of the story, please.

Originally posted by Swampy
Sweet start Agent Drake, keep up the good work

Originally posted by Hitman
Whoa...where did THIS come from??
Who cares!
I love it!

Agent_Drake...Welcome to the Fan Fics! Keep writing, man...you're off to a stellar start!

Thanks a lot everyone. The next part will be up shortly :)

Part 7:

"Setinals... Thousands." Said O2.
"****..."Said Hitman.
"What's a setinal?" Asked Haxxor.
"A machine built by us humans. It's only purpose is to kill." Replied Eon.
"Everyone keep quiet" Said Hitman.
A Machine flew by... It spotted them!
"Oh no!" Yelled Hitman.
"GO GO GO!!" Cried Eon.
"Get on the guns, Hitman and Eon!" Ordered O2.
Hitman and Eon ran over to the guns.
"Where the hell is MacLeod?"
Swisshhhh!
"Ah. Sorry, I was using the john. What'd I miss?"
"*Sigh* My god MacLeod! Come here and help me steer!"
"Oh **** setinals!"
O2 just looked at him and stared in awe. 'How could someone be so... Shall we say, un-intelligent?' Thought O2.
'Wow, at least I'm not the only one without a clue...' Thought Haxxor.
"Why aren't we moving!?" Screamed Hitman.
"Help me steer MacLeod!"
A machine spotted them... And started spinning rapidly... A chunk shot out of it... And it was heading for the ship!

HAHA!!!

This is going well! I can wait to see how this turns out. Keep it going Drake!

Originally posted by Eon dreamhacker
HAHA!!!

This is going well! I can wait to see how this turns out. Keep it going Drake!

Hey thanks man. :D

P.S. Everyone I write whenever I get feedback, so if you want the next part post your comments and within a half hour the next part'll be up. Thanks

Part 8:

"Oh my god..." Said Hitman, "GO NOW!!!!"
The Lurker slowly picked up off the ground. It was very fast and quick, not the fastest of the bunch, but pretty fast, all the same.
"What is that?" Asked Haxxor.
"I've seen it before... It's a bomb..." Hitman said to Haxxor, then to O2 he said "We aren't fast enough to lose it! Go as fast as you can, and keep our ship steady... I'm going to try and take it out!"
Around 30 other setinals saw them at all shot bombs. Apaarently the bombs had an AI of their own, for the were guided, yet could avoid everything, and it looked as if they were somehow communicating. Hitman shot... He shot and shot. The bombs were getting closer... Fast. He shot and shot, and then he formulated a plan.
"Stop the ship!!"
"What?" Cried Eon, "Are you crazy?"
"Trust me!! Please!" O2 looked a MacLeod doubtingly, and stopped the ship... The bombs were coming... Faster. All of a sudden the setianls that shot the bombs were coming, too. Hitman had a clear shot at a bomb.
"When I tell you..."
Closer...
"Do excactly..."
Closer...
"As I say!"
They were 30 seconds from the ship. He waited for 10 seconds.
"Go up now!"
O2 looked up and saw a hole leading up real high. The Lurker picked up. 15 seconds away. It curved up and picked up speed. Hitman shot and it hit a bomb. It blew up all the other bombs causing a chains reaction for the other bombs, blowing up all the setinals and bombs in sight. The fire was exploding up the hole around 3 times faster than the ship was going. It was getting hot. The explosion rose and rose... It was touching the ship...

You're very good. Now, why am I not in it?! ;) Just kidding, I don't live in the Matrix, it's fine with me. I like how it's all talking, very action packed.

Originally posted by Valasher
You're very good. Now, why am I not in it?! ;) Just kidding, I don't live in the Matrix, it's fine with me. I like how it's all talking, very action packed.

Don't fret anyone, this is going to be a big thing, like The Other Blue Pill. Not big as in good (unless you think so :)) but big as in long. I will not conclude until told to, when people are getting sick of it when I can't think of anything else to type. So you are all going to be in it in the long run. Everyones time will come. Be patient. Part 9 will be up shortly.
Thanks

Part 9:

"TURN LEFT NOW!!"
"100 degrees west!" Cried O2 to MacLeod. MacLeod hit a button and the ships electric panels turned, and O2 pushed the steering wheel to the side as hard as she could. Executing a 100 degree turn is not too simple. Everyone in the ship fell sideways. The made it. Everyone on the ship took deep breaths... Until...
"What was that?" Asked Haxxor.
"That was the most extreme moment you-"
"No... That sound... Just now... Did anyone else hear it?"
Hitman and Eon came across the platform to the steering room.
Haxxor heard it again. This time everyone heard it.
"What is that?" Asked Eon.
"Oh no...." Said Hitman.
"What?" Asked everyone else.
The noise was close now... The noise of movement... Of hundreds of setinals... Heading straight for them...

Originally posted by Agent_Drake
Part 10:

"TURN LEFT NOW!!"
"100 degrees west!" Cried O2 to MacLeod. MacLeod hit a button and the ships electric panels turned, and O2 pushed the steering wheel to the side as hard as she could. Executing a 100 degree turn is not too simple. Everyone in the ship fell sideways. The made it. Everyone on the ship took deep breaths... Until...
"What was that?" Asked Haxxor.
"That was the most extreme moment you-"
"No... That sound... Just now... Did anyone else hear it?"
Hitman and Eon came across the platform to the steering room.
Haxxor heard it again. This time everyone heard it.
"What is that?" Asked Eon.
"Oh no...." Said Hitman.
"What?" Asked everyone else.
The noise was close now... The noise of movement... Of hundreds of setinals... Heading straight for them...

good cliffhanger:) Waiting for the next part:)

Originally posted by smith_fan
good cliffhanger:) Waiting for the next part:)

Thanks. I love to keep readers thrilled for the next one; like a soap opera :) Part 10 will be up shortly

Part 10:

"Go... Now!!" Screamed Hitman.
The Lurker started moving. Hitman and Eon got back on the guns, O2 and MacLeod got back on the steering. Haxxor stood there.
"EMP IS CHARGED!!" Cried Xavier from the second floor.
"I think we can lose 'em!" Yelled O2 down to Xavier.
The ship pulled some extreme moves, to lose the setinals, but they were out of luck. One got on the ship. No one noticed. It pulled through and was in the room where everyone was. It went for Haxxor. Eon took a emp gun and shot it.
"USE THE EMP!!" Yelled MacLeod.
Xavier shot off the emp and all the setinals fell down to the ground lifeless. Haxxor fainted...

I fainted. Hmmmmm, I guess that would be....ANOTHER KICK BUTT CLIFFHANGER Agent_Drake. Alright, I like. Want More. Please.
Adios, until the next time I post about the story.

Originally posted by Haxxor
I fainted. Hmmmmm, I guess that would be....ANOTHER KICK BUTT CLIFFHANGER Agent_Drake. Alright, I like. Want More. Please.
Adios, until the next time I post about the story.

Lol, it honors me to get positive feedback, from the great and honorable Haxxor :p Thanks, part 11 is coming up.

Part 11:

Haxxor woke up lying on a bed. The door to the room he was in opened. It was Xavier.
"Hey Haxxor. It's over. We made it out." Said Xavier.
"What happened to me?" Asked Haxxor.
"You passed out. The shock and adreniline and surprise was too much for you. But that doesn't matter. What happened happened for a reason, and though that reason is unknown, the effect is still consiquencial. All that matters now is one thing."
"What is that?"
"Your training... Follow me."
Haxxor follow Xavier out of the room.
"Sit here" Said Xavier.
Haxxor sat down in the same chair he was in when he went into the white room with the TV, with Hitman.
"Stay focused. Stay still. Close your eyes." Said Xavier.
Xavier sat at a computer, hit some keys, and pressed a button on the screen. Haxxor felt a weird peircing sensation throughout his head. He felt like having an ice cream headache... But somehow a pleasureable one. He sat up fast, panting.
"Jesus Christ!"
"Hey, there's a hell of a lot more where that came from... Have some more."
"Definetly..."

Woah cool i like being the operator man go on make some more but i don't hope i end just like tank did:)

cheers

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
Woah cool i like being the operator man go on make some more but i don't hope i end just like tank did:)

cheers

Lol, hopefully not :)

Originally posted by Agent_Drake
Lol, hopefully not :)

well i hope you won't stop writing cause i'm kinda awaiting the next thing cause it's so good.want more. no NEED more

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
well i hope you won't stop writing cause i'm kinda awaiting the next thing cause it's so good.want more. no NEED more

Lol, thanks next part'll be up very soon

Part 12:

"You're done." Said Xavier.
"Wow... That was incredible..." Said Haxxor.
Xavier smiled. Just then Eon walked in.
"How was he?" Asked Eon to Xavier.
"6 and a half hours..." Said Xavier, "Around average. He has the knowledge of each of us here, a bit less. He excels in Kung-Fu and other various Martial Arts. Not the smartest of the pack, but he'll do."
"Excels in Martial Arts does he? How 'bout a fight?" Said Eon to Haxxor.
"...Alright."

Cool i think i will talk for the rest as i say more but i will read it tomorrow as my mother wants to go online blegh ;)

Ok can;t wait for your feedback :)

I like how its going, Drake! Hmm, Haxxor fainted just as the EMP went of....curious. Keep going!

i think we are ready for some more lets get the nxt part online keep em comin'

it is so cool
lets read more

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
i think we are ready for some more lets get the nxt part online keep em comin'

it is so cool
lets read more

Ok, part 13 comin up :)

Originally posted by Agent_Drake
Ok, part 13 comin up :)

Okey then ow and erm Drake can i put your name in my fan fic the year 5000: Mars comes in????? please

Part 13:

"This is a sparring program. It is similar to The Matrix. It has the same basic rules. Like gravity. What you need to know is most of these rules can be broken. Hit me." Said Eon.
Haxxor went into a fighting stance, as did Eon. Haxxor shot a punch et Eon. Eon dodged. Haxxor punched again. Eon blocked. Eon took a shot at Haxxor. He blocked it. Haxxor kicked Eon in the side, then tried again but Eon grabed his foot and threw him across the Dojo, in which they were fighting. Haxxor went for Eon but he ran to the wall. Haxxor chased him. Eon jumped on the wall, kicked back, over Haxxor, and, in the air, kicked back off from his foot, and it hit Haxxor in the back of the head, sending him flying into the wall.
"Hm. I don't think you're understanding what I told you. The Matrix is a program for your mind, Haxxor. In it, you can do whatever you beleive you can do. Lose all your fear, doubt and disbeleif. Then you can do anything..." Saying that, Eon went into another fighting stance.
Haxxor went for him, punched four times, and Eon blocked two. Eon kicked Haxxor in the leg, sending him to the ground. Haxxor got up with a punch that sent Eon flying. Eon kicked Haxxor, then punched him 2 times, and Haxxor got hit with all of them. Haxxor dove at Eon, but Eon jumped and was coming down hard for his back. Haxxor rolled to the side, and when Eon landed, Haxxor kicked him from the ground in the side, knocking him down. Haxxor then upracutted Eon sending him flying. He smacked into the wall.
"Good. Your skills are greater than I expected. Xavier. Load the jump program"

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
Okey then ow and erm Drake can i put your name in my fan fic the year 5000: Mars comes in????? please

Most certainly. It would be an honor :)

Hey wow thats cool man way over it you are so good me need more

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
Hey wow thats cool man way over it you are so good me need more

Lol, thanks a lot Xavier :D More will be up soon... Hopefully

Part 14:

"This is pretty much the same thing... Beleive you can, and you can. As long as you let go of all of it... There is nothing you can't do." With that, Eon jumped from the building, on which they were standing, and landed on the other one... That was at least 40 feet away! He landed on the other roof with a smack, that crushed some stone. He turned back to Haxxor. "Let it all go..."
Haxxor looked fearful and he looked like he had a lot of doubt... But he jumped... 10 feet... He was falling from the sky... For the ground, at top speed. He saw the street growing bigger and bigger. The freefall was intense... The street kept getting closer and closer... Closer and closer... He was a foot from the ground...

cool need more you keep us in suspence

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
cool need more you keep us in suspence

Lol thanks, but not really on this one... Everyone should know what happens next... Or do you? :)

I know but you could ad a twist you never know maybe he flys away

Lol, read the next part to find out ;) I'll post it right away :)

Part 15:

Haxxor was back in his chair. "I didn't make it."
"No one ever makes their first jump" Replied Eon. "You need your rest."

The door to Haxxor's room opened. Hitman came in. "I understand Eon already took you through the fighting and jump program... That was my job." Said Hitman. "Oh well. I understood you did well. That you excel in Martial Arts."
"Apparently so." Replied Haxxor.
"We have to go into the Matrix... I have to take you to see someone..."
"Who is that?"
"An old friend... She goes by Valasher..."

cool we need more
but it kinda has some resemblance to the original matrix doesn't it ah well it's still cool nice going need more

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
cool we need more
but it kinda has some resemblance to the original matrix doesn't it ah well it's still cool nice going need more

Yes it does resemble The Matrix. I changed around some parts, so you wouldn't be reading what you know, (Ex: He jumped through the mirror, not touched it etc...) and it's very ironic you say that, because that was the last Matrix-resembling part. The next will be new and surprising... With the same cliffhanging touch I love to post :)

Part 16:

Haxxor, Hitman, Eon and MacLeod all laid down in their chairs. Xavier plugged them in and hit "LOAD" on his computer screen. O2 stayed behind in case setinals came... They came too often nowadays, they needed to take special care.

"We're inside." Said Hitman.
Haxxor, Hitman, MacLeod and Eon walked out of the building they were in. They found a close car and Hitman punched out a window.
"You two, stay here and guard our phone." Ordered Hitman pointing at MacLeod and Eon.
"Sir, do you think it's necessary to do this?" Asked Eon
"No I'm just doing it to waste time and risk our lives" Said Hitman as he smiled. He led Haxxor into the car. Hitman started driving. He was telling Haxxor about Valasher, when all of a sudden a bullet shot the tires out. The car slowly stopped. Hitman looked trough the window, to his horror... An Agent...

I love how you veered way off from the original movie in the last post there, great cliffhanger... keep it coming!

"Sir, do you think it's necessary to do this?" Asked Eon
"No I'm just doing it to waste time and risk our lives" Said Hitman as he smiled.


Ha! I can't wait for the next bit!

Nice work there...I'm glad to see a departure from the original Matrix, though I could see why there would be major similarities...the way one is freed from the Matrix could very well be similar to the way it was portrayed in the movie, and now that Haxxor is free, the story can take its own direction, entirely. Keep going...nice work!

I like your style Agent Drake, always leaving us hanging on waiting for what happens next. The small chapters are great too. The perfect size for reading during a tea break at work.

Originally posted by Agent_Drake
Yes it does resemble The Matrix. I changed around some parts, so you wouldn't be reading what you know, (Ex: He jumped through the mirror, not touched it etc...) and it's very ironic you say that, because that was the last Matrix-resembling part. The next will be new and surprising... With the same cliffhanging touch I love to post :)

I read it and nice dang your good i gotta say we need more

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
I read it and nice dang your good i gotta say we need more

Originally posted by Swampy
I like your style Agent Drake, always leaving us hanging on waiting for what happens next. The small chapters are great too. The perfect size for reading during a tea break at work.

Originally posted by Eon dreamhacker
"Sir, do you think it's necessary to do this?" Asked Eon
"No I'm just doing it to waste time and risk our lives" Said Hitman as he smiled.


Ha! I can't wait for the next bit!

Originally posted by ThereIsNoMatrix
I love how you veered way off from the original movie in the last post there, great cliffhanger... keep it coming!

Lol Thanks a lot everyone. I din't think this story would turn out personally. :) Thank you all for your feedback.

Originally posted by Hitman
Nice work there...I'm glad to see a departure from the original Matrix, though I could see why there would be major similarities...the way one is freed from the Matrix could very well be similar to the way it was portrayed in the movie, and now that Haxxor is free, the story can take its own direction, entirely. Keep going...nice work!

Wow! Thank you sir! :D Part 17 coming up! :)

Part 17:

"Stay there, get low." Said Hitman to Haxxor as he got out of the car.
"Oh, but I disagree... Hitman it's been awhile since our last encounter... I see you have a new "recruit" so to speak... I'm afraid he has to come with us... We will let you go... But give us Haxxor..." Said the Agent.
"Agent Drake..." Said Hitman smiling," You know I can't do that... Now I suggest you get the hell away from here... And maybe I won't kill you..."
"Kill me? Ha! Don't you remember last time?"
"Yes I do. But times have changed. Now piss off!"
"Hmmm. I'm sorry. But I am not leaving without Haxxor..." Said Agent Drake as he pointed a gun at Hitman's head. A shot went off...

WOW cool i like it man keep on writing and i will to

just one thing if you write please write more because i can't stand to wait

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
WOW cool i like it man keep on writing and i will to

just one thing if you write please write more because i can't stand to wait

LOL, I write all the time. 4 parts per day around. I'm on this thing 24/7 (except for school) so basically whenever I get feedback I post :D Next part coming up :)

I'm not doing it 24/7 just write when i get inspiration i also have poëms to mind for my bundle

Part 18:

But he missed. He shot again. He kept missing. Until finally... Haxxor ran out of bullets. Agent Drake dodged so vigurously, he dropped his gun... Down the sewer. He had to fight Hitman. Man-to-Machine. Agent Drake cracked his neck... And it started... Hitman punched Agent Drake. Agent Drake punched Hitman 8 times, lifted him up by his shirt and punched him in the face, sending him flying back into a brick wall.
"Times have changed? Doesn't seem it to me..." Said Agent Drake smiling. He ran at Hitman. Hitman kicked him in the stomach and punched in the stomach twice, then Drake blocked the other two punches. He blocked in a way so he grabbed his fists after the punchs and threw him. Agent Drake jumped, coming down hard. Hitman was right beside the sewer. Agent Drake was coming closer... And closer... Hitman felt for the gun. Closer... He got it... But Drake was 8 feet away, in the air coming down at what seemed like light speed...

Wow cool i'll read next tomorrow cheers

Heh heh...kick my butt why don'tcha? ;) I like this! very cool action...good pace...Agents who feel and sound like Agents...nice work so far...

I agree. very nice Drake :D

Cool, i like it too.

Agent Drake enters the matrix!

I can't wait to see how Hitman does against you.

Heh heh... Thanks all. :D Answers are coming members... :)

Hey there when are you going to port the next part i hope soon cause as my sig says i lost my inspiration weeeeeeh:(
and everything you write is giving me inspiration:)

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
Hey there when are you going to port the next part i hope soon cause as my sig says i lost my inspiration weeeeeeh:(
and everything you write is giving me inspiration:)

Lol, thank you... I'll have my story up soon. :) I can only get part 19, maybe 20 up tonight, because there's a dance tonight at 7:00 PM, and it's 4:00 PM now. :(

Part 19:

Hitman just got the gun up in time... But he missed the shot. Agent Drake landed on his stomach, hard. He coughed up blood...
"Just as before..." Said Agent Drake "Pityful. A human being so pathetic and weak... Goodbye"
To Agent Drake, it looked as if Hitman was unconsious... So he lifted his foot, to come down hard on his throat, killing him instantly. He lifted his foot... As did Hitman with his gun... He shot Agent Drake in between the eyes.
"Well, not excactly as before..." Said Hitman as he smiled over the dead body... But to the surprise of Haxxor, it wasn't the body of the Agent. It was the body of a policeman.
"What happened?" Asked Haxxor.
"What do you mean?" Replied Hitman.
"The body... It changed..." Said Haxxor in awe.
"Oh yes... Agents are programs, Haxxor... They are machines in the real world, and they hack into the Matrix as we do, as humans... But their strength is unmatchable... They take bodies of humans that are not freed. Yet, their strength is based on rules. No one, has ever killed an Agent in a fight. They are so fast, guns have almost no use. As you saw earlier, they can move so fast, they can dodge bullets. Thank you, Haxxor for help me out."
"No problem... But you said no one has ever beaten and Agent... And that they can dodge bullets"
"Yes, but Agents are like humans... They can't sense things. They have insticts. He wasn't expecting me to shoot him, so his reaction time to dodge wasn't as great. And many people have killed Agents with guns, but no one has ever destroyed an Agent in a fight. Now come. You need to meet Valasher."

wow cool cliffy man nice answere next for me eill definetly be up later on

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
nice answere next for me eill definetly be up later on

...I'm sorry I don't understand lol... :D

I ment im gonna post my nxt part sooni've got some inspiration from you thanxx

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
I ment im gonna post my nxt part sooni've got some inspiration from you thanxx

Ok I understand now... Thanks, and no problem ;)

Part 20:

Hitman and Haxxor arrived at an apartment... Hitman led Haxxor out of the car, and into the building. They went upstairs... To the highest floor of the building. Hitman knocked twice, strong and bold. The door opened a crack. A voice of a woman said "Who is it?"
"Hitman... I have someone you need to meet." He looked over at Haxxor, as to show her who it is.
The door opened fully... Haxxor was almost blinded by the sight that lay before him...

Who cool need more that i will read tomorrow cause it's midnight here

cheers

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
Who cool need more that i will read tomorrow cause it's midnight here

cheers

Wow, thanks a lot! I'm surprised someone loves my story this much :)

Part 21:

She was like a goddess. It looked almost as if she was an angel. Haxxor was practically hypnotized by her.
"Haxxor, this is Valasher" Said Hitman
"Hello..." Said Haxxor.
"Pleased to meet you." Said Valasher. She extended her hand to shake. Haxxor shook it.
"Haxxor she will help you find your true skill." Said Hitman
"True skill?" Asked Haxxor
"A unique ability that only you posess, that you must learn to channel."
"Come, have a seat" Said Valasher. Haxxor and Hitman followed her into a living room. They all sat down.
"I'm going to ask you a few questions and you must not ask why. Were you bullied as a child?" Asked Valasher.
"No... I was more of the strong silent type. No one talked to me. I didn't talk to anyone... But if something happened... I came on hard." Said Haxxor.
"What is your favorite colour?" Asked Valasher.
Haxxor thought this was pointless. 'How is this relevant?' he thought... "Red"
"Did you have any pets?"
"No..."
"Were your parents together your whole life?"
"My dad died of cancer when I was 13."
"Do you have any diseases?"
"No..."
"Do you have a spouse?"
"...No..."
"Have you?"
"...No..."
"Let me see your hands."
Haxxor showed Valasher his hands.
"I see... Now show me your muscles."
Haxxor was a bit embarassed by this... But he was surprised... His muscles were about 7 times bigger than normal!
"I see. After seeing your results... I've come to see it. Your ability is...

"Do you have any diseases?"
"No..."
"Do you have a spouse?"
"...No..."
"Have you?"
"...No..."


LMAO, that is great.

WOW COOl im totally into the story cheers

Nice...My chest still hurts from being stomped by your agent...but very nice nonetheless... ;) hee hee!

Agent Drake, This story is developing really well. I really like it, some v funny moments

Lol, thanks all :D Next part should be up soon :)

Wow!! This is incredible! Unbeleivable! Wow! This is my first post and this story is the best one I've ever seen! :D This is impossibly good. Incredible! Unbeleivable! This is crazy! Insane! It's too good for words! It's the best thing I've ever read! Ever! And it's funny too :) Is it possible to be so good? Are you human?... Oh wait you're an Agent... Lol this is impossibly good. I can't beleive people can write stories like this... You should send this to The Wachowski brothers! You'll be famous! Wow! This is sooooooo good! Can't wait for the next part! :D

Originally posted by |\|eo
Wow!! This is incredible! Unbeleivable! Wow! This is my first post and this story is the best one I've ever seen! :D This is impossibly good. Incredible! Unbeleivable! This is crazy! Insane! It's too good for words! It's the best thing I've ever read! Ever! And it's funny too :) Is it possible to be so good? Are you human?... Oh wait you're an Agent... Lol this is impossibly good. I can't beleive people can write stories like this... You should send this to The Wachowski brothers! You'll be famous! Wow! This is sooooooo good! Can't wait for the next part! :D

Wow.... Uhhhh.... Thanks? Geez. I didn't think I was that good... Thank you... But I don't think I can send this to the W Brothers lol. High praise here I see :) :D
Thanks...
Drake

Part 22:

Haxxor was astounded by it. He couldn't beleive he could... Fly.
"How can I access this skill?" Asked Haxxor.
"You must learn to free yourself, and beleive you are able to. It is the same as everything else. Free your mind." Replied Valasher. "Come follow me..."
Valasher lead Haxxor and Hitman into a room which looked like a living room... Except the chairs were those of the ship.
"Have a seat" Said Valasher.
Haxxor sat down in the chair. He seemed confused by all this... He thought it was pointless. 'Secret skill? What's with that?' Thought Haxxor. But he did as he was told. There was a weird extention outlet from a computer. It was the same he used to enter the Matrix. Hitman plugged the plug in the back of his head... He felt the same sensation... He was no longer in the room...

Wow but how how could he be jacking in while he was inside the mstrix wow hope the answeres will come soon nice

greetzz Neo

ow and i see you have another fan:)

This is getting better and better and better etc.

plz carry on

Next part will be up soon don't worry :D
Thanks...
Drake

Come on Agent Drake, don't leave us hanging!

WE WANT MORE!
WE WANT MORE!
WE WANT MORE!

Originally posted by Swampy
Come on Agent Drake, don't leave us hanging!

WE WANT MORE!
WE WANT MORE!
WE WANT MORE!

Lol, ok, ok hang tight, I'll start posting it right away :D
Thanks...
Drake

Part 23:

Haxxor and Valasher were in a Green room. It was very similar to "The Construct" but it was green.
"How... We were just in the Matrix... How did we hack into the Matrix if we were already there?" sked Haxxor.
"This is a program similar to the Matrix." Said Valasher. "It is designed for releasing your ability. Find it and let it out."
"I don't understand... How do I do it?"
"Follow me..." Valasher walked into the green oblivion... And then she stopped. Haxxor followed her. She then pushed and a wall turned around and they walked through it... Into another green room... 'What's going on?' Haxxor thought. 'This is too strange.'
"We're almost there." Said Valasher.
She curved around some more green... Which apparently were walls. It was like a house of mirrors, except it was all green walls.
"Here we are." Said Valasher.
Haxxor curved around the last bend where Valasher was... And he couldn't beleive what he saw...

Cool i like it.

More but i won't answer anymore and you know why

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
Cool i like it.

More but i won't answer anymore and you know why

Thanks man... I'm getting my first case of writer's block! :( Lol :D
Thanks...
Drake

P.S. Yes I do know why... ;)

Originally posted by Agent_Drake
Thanks man... I'm getting my first case of writer's block! :( Lol :D
Thanks...
Drake

P.S. Yes I do know why... ;)


I don't know what music you listen to but heres a tip on how to lose a writers block


Mostly you can lose it by listening to music i listen to Evanescence and matrix soundtrack

works for me cheers

Originally posted by Neo Xavier
I don't know what music you listen to but heres a tip on how to lose a writers block


Mostly you can lose it by listening to music i listen to Evanescence and matrix soundtrack

works for me cheers

Hey thanks man... I don't got Evanescence, but I'll put on the Matrix Soundtrak right away :) Hope it works :)
Thanks...
Drake

Very, very nice.

I need to be in the next part :D

Just call me Seraph v.1.5

GASP

But what if a 2.0 comes along?!

Great story development here!

Seraph 1.5 (The 011100 is his name in Binary code)

Originally posted by Seraph~011100
Very, very nice.

I need to be in the next part :D

Just call me Seraph v.1.5

GASP

But what if a 2.0 comes along?!

Great story development here!

Seraph 1.5 (The 011100 is his name in Binary code)

Thanks man, you will be in one of the next few, not this next one though, I already wrote it, and it was before you asked ;)
Thanks...
Drake

24:

He saw fire... Miles and miles of fire... It stretched as far as the eye can see... Flames boiling and jumping. Haxxor started sweating just being in there. Up from him were tunnels, mazes in the roof, almost.
"Welcome to the "Flying" program." Valasher said to Haxxor.
"What... What do I do? This doesn't look too pleasant..." Said Haxxor with wide eyes.
"You must learn to overcome fear"
"I don't think I can"
"Then you will meet a fiery death..."
"Okay, okay... So I basically beleive I can fly, then what?"
"Fly through that maze at the top and you will eventually come out the the roof at the other end of the flame..."
Haxxor sighed... And he got low... Then slowly got up... Off the ground...

Part 25:

He was in the air... For 2 seconds... Then he hit the ground.
"What happened?" Asked Haxxor.
"What do you think happened?" Asked Valasher.
"...I didn't beleive?" Said Haxxor
"I know it is not an easy process to simply let it all go." I think you need more time..." Said Valasher.
"I am so confused... What is happening to me? Haxxor was getting a bit angry now.
"You are well-aware. The Matrix is not real... You have been freed" Said Valasher.
"Get us out of here Hitman." Commanded Valasher.
Haxxor watched as green obstacles overcame Valasher. She slowly faded, more and more green signs appearing over here. She vanished... And he slowly felt the same sensation...

26:

Haxxor felt like a failure. He couldn't do it. He couldn't just let go of all fear and doubt. For him, it was virtually impossible.
"I couldn't do it, Hitman. I just couldn't let it all go." Said Haxxor in shame.
"It's alright, Haxxor, I know the struggles you are having. I had the same problem. But eventually, when the right moment came, it was lost. But to an extent." Said Hitman. Hitman thanked Valasher for her troubles, and led Haxxor outside... To find three Agents, guns pointed at them...

27:

"Not you again..." Hitman said under his breath, seeing Agent Drake. "I thought you had learned your lesson. I see you've brought some friends..." He said as he looked at the two other Agents.
"Hitman, glad you could join us. This is Agent Kender, and this is Agent Ins... I'm really glad you showed up Hitman. It really-" Said Drake
"Made-" Cut off Kender.
"Our-" Cut off Ins.
"Day..." Finished Drake.
"...Why do you do that?" Asked Haxxor, annoyed.
"Oh, it's-" Said Drake.
"Just-" Cut off Kender.
"Our-" Cut off Ins.
"Thing..." Finished Drake.
"What do you want?" Asked Hitman
"We want what we came for." Said Kender.
"Which is?" Asked Hitman.
"That man behind you..." Said Drake. He pulled out a Magnum, and aimed it at Hitman's head.
"What? I thought Agents used Desert Eagles..." Said Hitman.
"There has been a change of plans..." Said Drake smiling. He shot...

Great Cliffhanger!

Lol -"Why do you do that?... Its... Just... Our... Thing..."

Originally posted by ThereIsNoMatrix
Great Cliffhanger!

Lol -"Why do you do that?... Its... Just... Our... Thing..."

Lol, thanks next part'll be up soon :)
Thanks...
Drake