Star Wars - MM version

MacLeod

Hey hey fellas guess who?!
Alright alright maybe the reaction won't be as big as I thought - after all I have indeed been good for a damned long time. But, I felt the itch, poked around this fanfic section for a very brief time, and here I am with yet another story, rust all over it and all. Hope you guys can spare a guy lacking practice a little slack ;)
For all the new guys around, I'm MacLeod, one of the olde writers around this turf. I know there's another Star Wars fic out there but my content shouldn't be conflicting at any levels I hope...this is just a shortie (I recall I always called my fics that though) to flex my writing muscles a little. As usual, I'll be using old MM folks for this fic. No biggie, I hope, and as usual, enjoy the ride!!



Star Wars - Shadow of the Republic
The Planet Dagobah, a year into the Clone War (Episode III)

The light transport cut through the thick humid evening air, it's almost musical humming and shiny newness an almost painful contrast to the dullness and gentle crooning of the dark, ominous jungles. A few creatures craned their heads in fearful instinct at the approaching spacecraft, then continued scanning the rest of the jungle soon enough, for in the dark jungles of Dagobah where nothing stayed at the top of the chain for long, anything that ignored its surroundings for long seldom lived to repeat it.
Coming down upon the clearing like a bird settling in to nest, the ship wasted no time in settling down. If who it had come for was still alive somewhere in the planet, the ship's presence had already been detected.
The comparatively harsh light of the ship's interior penetrated far into the misty gloom of the jungle swamp as the landing ramp extended and settled into the bog. There was a few moments' pause, and then a figure emerged; a small-statured Rodian dressed in the brown flowing robes of a Jedi. A short pleat of what little hair he had marked him as a student: a padawan. Though young and inexperienced, he had prodigious skill with the lightsaber, as marked by not one but two of the symbolic weapons hanging from within his cloak. Nathan sniffed the air tentatively, then declared in his small, high voice; "I've got a bad feeling about this."
"What's there to like about all this?" A confident voice rang out from behind him, but there was no mistaking a hidden uncertainty. The human female to whom it belonged to stepped out and surveyed the surrounding, careful to keep her cloak's hood on as though to keep out the humidity. It couldn't conceal completely the pleat that marked her as a Padawan as well, but it did keep her youth hidden, at least until she spoke. Sensing the fear within her long-time companion, Emma tried her best to be strong, for the both of them. She looked back once more at another standing further up the ramp. "Master? Are you alright?"
In such a dark shade of green as the rest of the swamp, the lone figure standing far at the back looked like he belonged here in Dagobah. And he might very well be: he sensed a connection the place had with his destiny, and had paused at the disconcerting thought. The Force was indeed strong here. Childlike in stature, his wrinkles, walking stick and deep voice gave the illusion away, and it was clear among the three who was the true superior. Master Yoda looked down at the two, furrowed his brows, and sighed heavily.
"Feel it too; do you not, Emma? The Force; strong it is here." He huffed as he prodded his age-impaired way down the ramp.
"Indeed Master Yoda. But this sensation...it is not like anything I've felt before. The Force feels...strangely....twisted here." She reached out with her mind, recoiling slightly at what she sensed.
"The Dark Side; you feel. Powerful; it is. Waiting. Expected this; did you not?"
It was true. Though young, Emma was gifted in the Force. Never one for lightsabers, she had chosen to hone her mastery over the Life-giving omnipresent flow of the universe, and was able to manipulate and sense a great many things. It was this sense that had lead them here in the first place.
It had all started with a trip years ago to this fringe planet. The Jedi scoutship had not even intended to land, but something had called out to it's pilot. That something compelled Nathan's teacher, Master MacLeod, to divert and land the both of them on it's surface, in this very same spot. They had promptly been ambushed as they disembarked by a very large reptillian denizen.
MacLeod, however, was among the Jedi's very best lightsaber-wielders, easily quoted as Mace or Qui-Gon's equal, if not more; and more than a little rebellious. Using a hilt slightly longer yet less ornated then most, his green saber had barely tasted the air; it's full length barely reached, when it retracted again, but not before thoroughly tasting the beast's ichor. It was still in mid-pounce when it was dissected into six parts to land behind the Master's stooped figure.
As it is commonly known, nothing happens by coincidence. Something in the Force intrigued the Jedi Master greatly, and the attack further confirmed whatever suspicions he had. Upon some thought, he had sent his Padawan back to Coruscant with nary an explanation, except instructions to await his return, no matter how long it took. This was customary for the strange Corellian, but it had been years since Nathan last saw his Master disappear into the planet's mists; the longest period of absence since. The confirmation of the Dark Side's presence only served to deepen his fears. The Jedi Council decided that as a Jedi with a Padawan to teach, this period of isolation was too long to be tolerated, and sent another to find him. This other was his equally rebellious close friend, and rumoured lover, the Jedi Master Truth Marr, who was incidentally Emma's teacher.
A descendent of the last survivor of a now-extinct race, the beautiful Truth was so named because of the nature of her race. She was a Force-Sensitive Miraluka, a descendant of the only Miraluka to survive a genocidal holocaust; Visas Marr. The Miraluka were all born blind, as was signified by an extra fold of cloth in her hood obscuring her eyes. Otherwise human looking, Truth did not have to worry about her sight because her mastery over the Force gave her sight beyond the visual. Of those who had chosen to bathe themselves in the Force, few could compare with Truth. Yoda himself treated the woman as an equal, and her unique ability to see into the deepest Truth in the heart of any person she touched, as well as occasionally being able to see into the future, made her a powerful Force User, indeed.
However, she had only sent one communique since touching down, and that had been before she had even started out into the jungle. Since then months had passed, and the Jedi Council grew worried. Furthermore, with the devastation among the Jedi Order the Battle of Geonosis and the ongoing Clone War had wrought, Masters were in short supply, and consequently Yoda himself had volunteered to investigate the planet and get to the bottom of it. Now here they all were, squinting out into the darkness.
A burly-looking Clone Trooper peeked out of the cockpit, his helmet removed in his strangely trademark habit. The Trooper had always seemed different from the others though equally competent, and Truth had taken to befriending him, even giving him a nickname: Shin. "Masters, there's a problem." As soon as he had said it, the ground shifted under their feet, and the ship was suddenly a few degrees askew.
"Strange...the ground was solid when I was here last!" Nathan glanced around worriedly. Though the forest had rapidly claimed the remains of the beast MacLeod had slain, he still recognised the surrounding foliage...or was it because everything looked the same in this murky darkness? Nathan couldn't tell.
"Nevertheless; adapt we shall." He turned to Shin and beckoned at him to close the ramp. "Leave; you will have to. Await further instructions in orbit; for now." The Trooper nodded in his usual grim manner, then turned back to his controls as the ramp retracted. In moments the ship lifted its way up into the sky and roared its way into the stratosphere, leaving the three in the suddenly heightened silence, and the rapidly descending darkness.
Master Yoda took in another slow breath. There was something very wrong in the planet, he sensed, and the Dark Side was only the beginning.

The Dark Side...

Immediately Yoda knew that something was wrong. The Padawans, competent as they were, reacted as well, Emma dropping to a wary stance and Nathan igniting his yellow and blue sabers as dark shadows and an eerie chittering rose over the swamp. Dark, nightmarish shapes began taking form around them, and before long they could make out five sinister, reptillian shapes. Reptillian and almost bipedal shapes Nathan knew only too well. Yoda and Emma didn't have to ask to sense that these were more of the beast that MacLeod had fought when they had arrived earlier.

Yet Five of them!...

If the single creature before was no coincidence, these were surely organised. tightening their poses, the three dimunitive figures closed up before the encroaching beasts...


...Hope you liked that entree, folks! Hope to update this fast enough...it feels good to write - type - again!...
DonDaddy

First, get your ass into the RPG system.

Second, great to have you back and writing. Nevermind any rust, this is your normal fantastic work. Good to see a talent like yours back on the forum mang.
ThereIsNoMatrix

Mac! It's great to have you back! You haven't lost your touch at all; this is off to a wonderful start!

Don't leave us waiting, and do visit more often!
Swampy

Holy Hell, Macs back!

Great to see you back man, and the fic started well too. Keep it coming
FoolOnTheHill

Good start, looking forward for more!
Eon

w0000t, the master of the quill has returned, damn it's good to see you again Mac and we got treated to a new story to boot, which by the way sounds absolutely awesome so far, and welcome back.
freeyourmind

Great beginning. I'll be following this. Heheh. I have a small high voice.

So are you back for good? for a visit? just to the fan-fic area?
MacLeod

We-ell...kinda more for the fanfic. I don't think I'll be around often so don't you young whipper-snappers go challenging me for some RPG fight for kicks! lol
Hmmm...maybe not so many Star Wars fans here, so I'll do a little more explaining from now on. I even tried paragraphing, but the post didn't seem to register the extra spaces I left at the start of each para; hmm. Anyway, Rodians are these green, skinny creatures with big black eyes and tube-like mouths often seen in the movie (that poor sap Han Solo zapped way back in Episode IV was one), so that explains your teensy voice, FYM. Lol.
Hitman

Holy crap, It's Macleod!!! Good to have you back bro, dying to see more, and would love to be a part of yet another of your legends...
DonDaddy

Feel free to include me as always. Just dont take so damn long to post another installment. The natives are getting restless.
NMN

Gosh-diddly-darn, Mac! That was excellent. I love the description of the Jedis. Very Star Wars universe-y.

Please write more quickly!
MacLeod

Alright; I'll try my best to keep these coming.


"Remember your Training! Focus on the here and now, you must!" The elevated voice Yoda barked in was enough alone to worry the two Padawans. Calming himself, Nathan crisscrossed his blades so they protruded backward past his side, ready to swing forwards in scything blows. Behind him, Emma picked the nearest target, then raised a hand toward it.
Nothing Happened.
"Master Yoda! I can't seem to calm these beasts!" Emma felt a chill down her spine. This had never happened before.
"Bathed in the Dark Side; they are! Twisted; their minds have become!" As though to punctuate the Jedi Master's words, the creatures pounced.
Nathan was ready. He lunged sideways and forwards, placing himself between two of the oncoming beasts while dodging the first's blows. The lightsabers hummed into action, one blade arcing up to sever it's other arm while the other lashed out in a savage arc to slash the creatures in two. He was therefore surprised when the howling beast, missing its arm to the first blow, somehow maneuvered the other down to block the killing blow, and his saber actually glanced with a sizzle off it's scythe-like claws.
Before he could register the shock at an organic being actually being able to withstand a lightsaber's touch, Nathan's senses screamed at him as the second reptile closed the distance. He brought his blades back together just in time to deflect the first savage swipe, but was not quick enough to dodge the second, which carved a deep slash across his chest and sent him reeling.
"Nat!!" Alerted by the high-pitched squeal of her friend, Emma rushed towards him. Gathering her strength as she moved, she raised her hands as though to grasp some invisible ball in front of her face, then took a deep breath as she reached him. What came out was more than a puff, though: a high-pitched wall of sound with a force strong enough to make the air waver slammed into the two monsters, which easily absorbed the small physical impact. But it's true power devastated the beasts: the sonic overload knocking their inner ears useless.
Finally igniting her cyan saber as she ran in, she impaled the first screaming monstrosity, the proceeded to slice the other's elongated face off. She was shocked as well when similar chitin around its face deflected the blow, but then reacted quickly, twirling her saber around for awhile to gather momentum and then spinning gracefully to decapitate the agonized beast in a clean blow.
In the meantime, Yoda had also just reached Nathan, only to find two other creatures following the seemingly defenseless dwarf for the kill. As if in a cruel game, they tilted their heads seemingly in concert and charged in from two opposite directions. Yoda kept his head low, and Nathan croaked weakly in panic: "Master Yoda!"
With a stoic determination in his eyes, Yoda raised his gaze to one of the creatures, waving his hand lightly. Instantly the reptile's eyes glazed over and turned an opaque black, and it howled and flailed uselessly as it suddenly found itself struck temporarily blind. Turning at the roar of the other, Yoda responded just as the other reptile leapt. Unwavering, he pushed his arms out in a warding gesture.
It was as if an invisible wall suddenly formed right in front of it. The monster went hurtling backwards, smashing against a tree and collapsing in a stunned heap.
"Master!" Yoda spun around at the pained warning just as the blinded reptile, flailing about in an attempt to regain its original target, bore down on him. It opened its mouth wide open in an earth-shaking roar...then stopped dead in its tracks, keeling over with a gurgle. A Force-thrown assisted blue lightsaber stuck clean through its mouth to the back of its head. Yoda turned to Nathan on the ground, his arm still extended in the throw, nodded his head at the assist, then crouched beside him, using the Force to re-knit severed muscles and blood vessels on the wounded Padawan's chest.
Nearby, Emma struggled with the last reptile. As she was not truly skilled with the saber, she could only manage to keep the beast's rabid jaws from reaching her. Billowing with rage and frustration at it's elusive target, it switched to another more vulnerable one: the crouching Yoda. Before Emma could move in to block it, it had already bounded past her, bearing with frightening speed on the defenseless pair.
"No!!" Emma had no time to think; only react. A sudden spark of anger pulled the Force into her outstretched fingers, manifesting as a sizable chain of lightning that struck the reptile dead in its tracks, writhing in agony...and another; and then another.
"Emma; no!" Yoda's voice was filled with shock, which turned to concern. He raised one hand out at the writhing creature to hold it down with the Force, while raising the other in a pleading gesture at Emma. "The Dark Side; filled with anger you are using! Only serve to strengthen the creature; it will!"
Sure enough, it began to shrug off the debilitating effects of the electrical storm, even gaining strength in its movements. Dismayed and shocked at what she had just done, Emma faltered, looking down at her hands.
"Help me!" At Yoda's plea, she looked back up. "The Dark Side; envelopes the creature it does. Makes it strong. Makes it...suggestible." He wrinkled his brow as he concentrated on reaching deeper into the Force.
Emma understood his hint. Reaching into the pure heart of the Jedi deep inside her, she forced away the anger and confusion in the wake of her display of power, focusing instead on the blanket of the Dark Side enveloping the creature. She confirmed Yoda's words: deep in all the layers of rage lay the simple, confused mind of the reptile, too primitive to understand how it was being manipulated. Working in concert with Yoda, Emma concentrated now on creating their own barrier in the Force, one that shut the creature out from the Dark Side. Sure enough, when isolated from the mind-warping effects of the Dark Side, the creature's baser instincts re-emerged. Still fearsome but no longer enraged, the reptile growled cautiously at the creatures it had seemingly never seen before, then bounded back off into the jungle.
Awed by both the effectiveness and the lesson in the feat, Emma slumped heavily down to a crouch. Rising painfully, Nathan retrieved his sabers and joined Master Yoda in limping to her.
"This use of the Dark Side; an accident it cannot be. Taught you; this skill was." Yoda's concerned eyes searched hers for the truth.
She looked back, at a loss for words. "I...I...It's something I saw Master Truth use, though never to teach me. In times...in times when she had no choice."
Yoda shook his head. "A Choice; there always is. Disturbing; the nature of your Master's. The Force; a conduit of good it must be used as. Always in defense; never to harm." He looked back out the gathering darkness, as Nathan helped her back on her feet. "Catalyst for this...Unpredictability; this planet is. Dangerous." He paused, and the Padawans reflected on the disturbing thought of the extent of power that could bend those fierce creatures to it's will.
He turned back to the two, picking up his walking stick. "Worried for your Masters; I am."
And with that, the three wordlessly began the hard trudge into the jungle depths.
Hitman

Awesome! Truly awesome. Write more you must, and quickly, yesss...
freeyourmind

Indeed so. I especially like how convincing Yoda is.
NMN

Hell yes, Mac! That was sweet. I like the new nature you're bringing to the Force. Good stuff.
suicide blond

Welcome home Mac. Damn good piece of writing. I don't venture in here a lot and just happened upon it and am glad I did. More please.
ThereIsNoMatrix

That was flippin' awesome, Mac! The story truly feels like a yet untold saga in the Star Wars Universe... Bravo!

If you need another character... perhaps some sort of Sith or dark-side character in particular... feel free to use me.
veradis

I've been waiting for a new brilliant work of yours, and this is perfect! You are truly amazing at action scenes. More!
Eon

Hehehe, I use the dark side, fucking sweet Mac, I'm loving it.
Swampy

As usual Mac, bloody excellent. Kicking ass this is, to read more can i not wait.mmmmm
MacLeod

Hmmm...a dark side character, more characters...i'm afraid I don't know if I can, because I'm trying to make this piece short and small. Big problem when you're playing in a universe where there's only one Sith Lord who for now can't die...at least till Episode 3, lmao...
suicide blond

Make it how you want it Mac. I am sure we will enjoy reading it. Now get back in here and write more.
DonDaddy

But a Sith Lord needs some minions who can be sacrificed in really loud and really kewl ways to advance the story.
suicide blond

Darth Sarcasma has got a point Mac. It will be interesting to see what you come up with.
Hitman

indeed...push me to the dark side with all of this waiting you do...now more write, or trachea crush i will...mmmmm!
DonDaddy

"I only force-choke you cause I love you, baby!"
suicide blond

LMFAO, Get in her Mac before they start spouting poetry or more pee on this quotes.
Psycho

Hmmm...a dark side character, more characters...i'm afraid I don't know if I can, because I'm trying to make this piece short and small. Big problem when you're playing in a universe where there's only one Sith Lord who for now can't die...at least till Episode 3, lmao...

DUDE!! MacLeod, write faster, you must!!

BTW: Muahaha, if you need a character, here is one.

I, Psycho, will be your Sith Lord. A Jedi Academy dropout who has been twisted by my hatred towards the Jedi temple for throwing him out.

There you go, continue writing.

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